Your script is 'too talky'? Then it's made for television

Writers are a backstabbing bunch. We're secret haters and revenge-list makers. As a rule, a writer - a good one, anyway - would rather chew glass than say anything supportive of someone else's work. Writers's workshops can become studies in just-under-the-surface rage. Once, after I had presented my pages, there was a long pause. "I like it," said a classmate, hesitatingly, adding a slight upward inflection at the end, so it sounded more like, "I like it?"

"Yeah, I like it too?" agreed another. "But isn't there too much dialogue? I mean, all that talking and talking," said the bossy girl in class, the one who announced at the start of the term that she wasn't interested in "happy movies" and "pabulum" while staring pointedly at me. "Well, I guess it's kind of talky," I said. "You know what this is?" another classmate said, suddenly. "This is television. That's what this is."

It took me quite a long time to realise that this was meant as an insult. And in a way, it was a valid insult: television does tend to be a little talky. Or, as a highly successful and major-award-winning writer I know puts it, "Television shows, like Shakespeare, rely heavily on dialogue." But then, so does life, really. I mean, most of what we do all day is: we sit, we talk. And so when you're thinking about what might make a good television show, it's a good idea to try to come up with characters and stories that lend themselves to fresh dialogue.

But there's a natural tendency, if you're a screenwriter, when you hear a story or an anecdote, to think: could this be something? Could this be a pitch? For instance, I have a friend who was telling me a pretty sad story, a true story - let's not get into the details, let's just say that it involves his once-very rich dad suddenly being pretty broke, which is potentially funny, but he also has pancreatic cancer, which isn't so potentially funny, but he has to move in with his new-age liberal vegan daughter to be closer to the hospital where he's being treated, which is potentially funny.

And all of this is going through my head while he's telling me this and I'm supposed to be thinking, "this is a sad story; this poor guy; he's going to lose his dad" but what I'm really thinking is, could this be a pitch? I mean, with the right casting? Except there's sort of a bump with the illness and that's kind of a downer - and I admit it: I like happy stories! - and then I notice my friend noticing me not listening to him and I unthinkingly blurt out what I've been thinking, which is: "Does it have to be pancreatic cancer?"

And then a day ago, I was talking to another friend of mine, a feature writer, and I was telling him about this story I heard from someone in the intelligence business. Apparently, years ago, someone leaked a list of former CIA informants living in Eastern Europe - it was an old list, by the time of the leak, the people on it were in their seventies - but enough of them were still alive that it caused some trouble. A lot of old scores to settle, a lot of angry old guys. Old men were turning up dead.

"My God," he said. "That's a feature pitch." "But aren't the guys too old?" He thought for a moment. "Maybe it's not post Cold War," he said. "Maybe there's a young guy trying to solve the problem. Maybe it was a computer glitch that leaked the list and the young nerdy computer guy in the agency is the only one who can solve it. And he pairs up with a former tough guy - a Clint Eastwood, a Gene Hackman - and it's Eastwood and Shia Laboeuf or that kid from the vampire movies."

A long pause. "Do you mind if I use that?" my friend asked. "Take it," I said. "I'm working on a cancer comedy." "A cancer comedy?" he asked. "Isn't that going to be too talky? Oh, right, I forgot. You write television." And he said it just the way the student said it to me, years ago, in film school. In a supportive, kind, and insulting way. Rob Long is a writer and producer based in Hollywood